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Post by Bat on Wed Feb 19, 2014 9:09 am

Hi. I am planning to make an RPG but I need help fix some things. Please post what it needs to work on and, if you have a title idea, I would appreciate it.

It takes place in a futuristic city where there are flying cars, robot polices, robot etc. Basically, high-tech stuff.
But there are some parts of this huge city is that the technology there is under develop than those in the city. It is the rural area. The government treat that place as a junk yard. Each place is different and unique. Although, the people live in poverty. Their technology is steampunk-like and scraps mashed together.

I have one idea about the advanced technology. People have an exoskeleton suit or cyber suits to increase their abilities like jumping higher, flying, produce electricity on their hands by suits even other elements. The suits only use material or elements inside of it or around it to do those things. Like it released some type of elements in the air to make water appeared on the palm of the user and has a function called "gravity controller". The function comes with the suit and it is where the user can use gravity to manipulate the elements. For example: "I used my suit to release elements to make fire appear on my hands. Next, I activated the gravity controller to manipulate the flames and spread it across up to my other hand. I then release it into the air until the fire died out. The gravity controller has limited distance on what to control

So how will everyone play it?
My character is a genius prodigy that takes technology from the city and the junk yard to test it out. He does something that start problems with the government and endangering the people in the rural areas. The government is concerned about the incidents and send in bots to keep the rural people in check. A resistance is called to stop this but it is not big enough. But it will slowly grow until there is a war between the two opposing sides. But, now, there is no resistance


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Post by WritingBookworm on Wed Feb 19, 2014 7:15 pm

Your idea sounds pretty cool. Very Happy The whole gravity controller and suit thing sounds creative and thought out, as does the setting.
If you want a critique, then I'd say work on the organization. You have a fair amount of ideas and that's great, but it's clunky. For example, keep all of the information about technology in one place and in setting in another. These can sometimes go together, but technology looks to be a big part of the RPG so I'll have to say to keep them separate.
But this is honestly not really a big problem--it's nothing that can't be fixed through some simple editing.
Oh, and for the plot, it's a good one, but just make sure it's loose enough so that not everything's set in stone.

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Post by Bat on Wed Feb 19, 2014 9:00 pm

@WritingBookworm wrote:Your idea sounds pretty cool. :DThe whole gravity controller and suit thing sounds creative and thought out, as does the setting.
If you want a critique, then I'd say work on the organization. You have a fair amount of ideas and that's great, but it's clunky. For example, keep all of the information about technology in one place and in setting in another. These can sometimes go together, but technology looks to be a big part of the RPG so I'll have to say to keep them separate.
But this is honestly not really a big problem--it's nothing that can't be fixed through some simple editing.
Oh, and for the plot, it's a good one, but just make sure it's loose enough so that not everything's set in stone.

Yeah, the tech will be separate.

How do I make the plot loose? Btw I will have another character who is the governor's son.

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Post by Bat on Thu Feb 20, 2014 7:07 pm

writing?

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Post by WritingBookworm on Mon Feb 24, 2014 7:15 pm

Ugh, sorry, I've been pretty busy. Basically, just let the characters drive the plot. That's critical in novels amd other stuff as well. So a war is a good destination to keepin mind, but if you strongly feel the characters pulling it in another direction, then let it go in that direction.

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Post by Bat on Mon Feb 24, 2014 7:24 pm

Oh ok. Thank you

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